Wednesday, July 10, 2013

Monsoon Rains - 1

THE ULTIMATE BLOG CHALLENGE DAY 10

 
Ocean of vastness,
For a coloured paper-boat,
A waterlogged lane.



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10 comments:

  1. Shilpa GargJuly 10, 2013 at 9:30 PM

    Aha! Liked your take on the prompt... the picture and the words compliment each other. Very nice :)

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  2. SuKupedia ™ :) :)July 11, 2013 at 3:58 AM

    oh ho.. liked it liked it.. read it like thrice and then figured it out.. nice nice :)

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  3. UnknownJuly 11, 2013 at 7:26 AM

    Very imaginative!

    Kathy
    http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com

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  4. PixieJuly 11, 2013 at 9:26 AM

    Very nice! :)
    I am still struggling with writing one! :(

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  5. Tall Girl in Japan July 11, 2013 at 12:19 PM

    Lovely Haiku. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Shows more than it tells and the image compliments it so well !
    Do you think the juxtaposition could be achieved better by putting "A waterlogged lane" as the first line? (just a thought !)

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  6. the little princessJuly 11, 2013 at 12:46 PM

    awww....so nice! in so few words u have managed to convey that things look different when seen from each one's perspective... hai na? beautiful!

    when will i ever write a haiku?

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  7. MeJuly 11, 2013 at 1:46 PM

    Reminds me of U Apala..
    Beautiful Red in the sea of Grey :)

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  8. sulekkhaJuly 11, 2013 at 5:55 PM

    This challenge is so interesting and love Ruchira's suggestions.

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  9. Afshan ShaikJuly 12, 2013 at 3:30 PM

    cool Haiku
    this ones my fav so far ;)
    came from write tribe

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  10. Sankara Jayanth SJuly 16, 2013 at 9:55 AM

    wonderful haiku! Brings back childhood memories.
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    My haiku.

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