Friday, July 5, 2013

The Dance

THE ULTIMATE BLOG CHALLENGE DAY 5



"Dance with me," she said.

And they danced. Danced through the night, till the wee hours of morning, even after the music had stopped and the floor had become empty. Everything around them had turned sublime, barring her sweet fragrance and his strong cologne. They embraced, they waltzed, they whispered sweet nothings in each others' ears - they looked hopelessly in love. 

They had lost count of the hours, the dancing bodies seeked solace. And then things changed. His love struck heart ached. He could feel her drift away from his embrace. Their dancing bodies had become still, their entwined fingers became loose. She was moving away, he did not want to let go off her. He tried to hold her back, but then, darkness engulfed him, and she was gone. 

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She silently tucked the gun between the folds of her gown, glanced at his cold lifeless body and walked out. Her revenge had been taken.



17 comments:

  1. Wow! It was so sudden and yet you eased the reader so smoothly into the scene!

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  2. ohhh. I was jolted.Reading about their dance I expected a romantic ending. but a well written short story.

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    1. i wanted to create the impression of romance which was not the point of the story... glad u liked it :)

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  3. OMG! Wow!! This is quite a write up ! Wonderfully executed !! kudos!

    Richa

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    1. aww! thanku richa!! am so glad u liked it!

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  4. I agree with Brendan there.. the transition was so sudden but yet you managed a perfect smooth landing :) :)

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  5. cold blooded murder! wow! I didn't see that coming!

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  6. Beautiful story. The end was unexpected.

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  7. OMG!! That was shocking! A great twist! Super :)

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  8. Woah! That was unexpected! Some revenge! :D
    Reminded me of Tracy Whitney in If Tomorrow Comes. I love such revenge stories!
    UBC Day 5 - "Impressions In Life"

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  9. Amazingly written! The most apt words were used to describe the scene. :)

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